Thank you for your application. At this time, we would like to ask for a slight revision; specifically we'd like to see a revised first person sample, one which adheres to the present tense format which is used in the "Ruby City RP" community. We notice that there is some consistency issues with your tense usage in the sample given, and would therefore like to see either a new or revised sample.

Feel free to submit your revisions any time before the next app round and they will be processed asap!