At this time, we would like to see a revision on the personality. Specifically, we'd like to see you touch on more of the character's motivations for crime, and expand more upon his main theme of fear.
Further, we would like to ask for clarification on some historical points. On the subject of Jonathan Crane's family, you state that he is raised by his great-aunt, but canon resources we've drawn from describe her as a great-grandmother. Further, the resources state that Crane's murder of his great-grandmother comes after the car accident his schoolmates were involved in. While we understand that origin stories can differ between continuities, we would like to see these discrepancies addressed.
Feel free to submit your revisions any time before the next app round, and they will be processed ASAP!
REVISION REQUESTED
At this time, we would like to see a revision on the personality. Specifically, we'd like to see you touch on more of the character's motivations for crime, and expand more upon his main theme of fear.
Further, we would like to ask for clarification on some historical points. On the subject of Jonathan Crane's family, you state that he is raised by his great-aunt, but canon resources we've drawn from describe her as a great-grandmother. Further, the resources state that Crane's murder of his great-grandmother comes after the car accident his schoolmates were involved in. While we understand that origin stories can differ between continuities, we would like to see these discrepancies addressed.
Feel free to submit your revisions any time before the next app round, and they will be processed ASAP!