At this time we are requesting revisions before we consider your application for acceptance. Specifically, we are concerned with a few key points; we feel that your application displays an out-of-character tone, making it difficult to pinpoint your character's personality clearly, as well as only providing a very basic idea of the way in which your character's mind works. Moreover, your first-person sample doesn't fit the application's basic requirements. We would like to ask for a general revision on both of those.
We would also like to add that we won't be accepting the use of two different accounts for your character, so we ask you to reconsider that as well.
REVISION REQUESTED
At this time we are requesting revisions before we consider your application for acceptance. Specifically, we are concerned with a few key points; we feel that your application displays an out-of-character tone, making it difficult to pinpoint your character's personality clearly, as well as only providing a very basic idea of the way in which your character's mind works. Moreover, your first-person sample doesn't fit the application's basic requirements. We would like to ask for a general revision on both of those.
We would also like to add that we won't be accepting the use of two different accounts for your character, so we ask you to reconsider that as well.