1) Would you mind please providing a link to or a screencap of the Plurk in question? None of us recall okaying the use of two accounts, though if we somehow mislead you we do apologize for that. We go through applications as a group, and the decision to decline the use of multiple accounts was a unanimous one, in keeping with a standing policy of ours.
2) Some specific parts we felt were out-of-character are as follows;
- The examples you showed for Hulk's style of play don't demonstrate any of the complexity he shows, either as a "separate character" or as a usually-restrained aspect of Bruce's own personality. There is more to Hulk than just the mindless tank shown when his change comes involuntarily, and we don't feel that your examples adequately demonstrate that(despite your acknowledgment of this difference in his "Personality" section). Further, the bold-print, sentence-fragment bracket-spam playing is quite simply not the sort of quality of play we would like to see in Ruby City.
- The overall lack of clarification regarding Bruce's thought processes and how they result in the conclusions he draws is a large part of what we felt was OOC. Banner is a very complex character and while obviously we don't expect you yourself to be a super-genius capable of following every nuance of his thinking, we'd like to see a bit more grasp of how he tends to reason(given that his intellect and rationale are such a large part of who he is).
- Most specifically, there's not much mention of how the sudden change of becoming the Hulk has affected Bruce's life, mindset, etc, and this really should make up a huge part of who he is now. You do mention that he tends to withdraw from most social situations, but simply referring to him as an "emotional recluse" is fairly vague and we'd like to see more clarification over how that effects him as an individual.
- Your revised First-Person Sample does look good, however! That's much more along the lines of the sort of thing we were looking for, thank you for taking care of that so handily.
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2) Some specific parts we felt were out-of-character are as follows;
- The examples you showed for Hulk's style of play don't demonstrate any of the complexity he shows, either as a "separate character" or as a usually-restrained aspect of Bruce's own personality. There is more to Hulk than just the mindless tank shown when his change comes involuntarily, and we don't feel that your examples adequately demonstrate that(despite your acknowledgment of this difference in his "Personality" section). Further, the bold-print, sentence-fragment bracket-spam playing is quite simply not the sort of quality of play we would like to see in Ruby City.
- The overall lack of clarification regarding Bruce's thought processes and how they result in the conclusions he draws is a large part of what we felt was OOC. Banner is a very complex character and while obviously we don't expect you yourself to be a super-genius capable of following every nuance of his thinking, we'd like to see a bit more grasp of how he tends to reason(given that his intellect and rationale are such a large part of who he is).
- Most specifically, there's not much mention of how the sudden change of becoming the Hulk has affected Bruce's life, mindset, etc, and this really should make up a huge part of who he is now. You do mention that he tends to withdraw from most social situations, but simply referring to him as an "emotional recluse" is fairly vague and we'd like to see more clarification over how that effects him as an individual.
- Your revised First-Person Sample does look good, however! That's much more along the lines of the sort of thing we were looking for, thank you for taking care of that so handily.