At this time we are requesting a revision before we consider your application for acceptance. Specifically, we would like you to please examine and revise the grammar and overall writing quality of your application, as they are not in keeping with what we would like to see in Ruby City's gameplay.
We know that you as a player are more than capable of excellent writing and continually demonstrate it with the characters you already play with us, so please do feel free to submit your revision for reassessment anytime that is convenient for you and we'll be happy to look it over.
[REVISION REQUESTED]
At this time we are requesting a revision before we consider your application for acceptance. Specifically, we would like you to please examine and revise the grammar and overall writing quality of your application, as they are not in keeping with what we would like to see in Ruby City's gameplay.
We know that you as a player are more than capable of excellent writing and continually demonstrate it with the characters you already play with us, so please do feel free to submit your revision for reassessment anytime that is convenient for you and we'll be happy to look it over.
Thank you for your cooperation!