Although everything looks pretty good, we would like for you to revise your Third Person Sample to reflect the personality traits you listed through a bit of dialogue. As it is now, your third person sample does not allow us to get a read on your character's more active traits.
Revision Requested
Although everything looks pretty good, we would like for you to revise your Third Person Sample to reflect the personality traits you listed through a bit of dialogue. As it is now, your third person sample does not allow us to get a read on your character's more active traits.