bifroster: (someday i'll cross that rainbow bridge)
jane foster ([personal profile] bifroster) wrote in [personal profile] rubycitymods 2013-02-17 04:11 am (UTC)

Re: REVISION REQUESTED

Here is a revision in past tense!


Jane was not sure what was going on—

Oh, who was she kidding? Of course she knew what was going on. She kept her eyes opened when she initially felt that tug, kept her eyes widen open when she was on that trained, and made sure to observe every little thing that she could. She didn’t know any specifics, but she did know that she was going somewhere that didn’t exist on Earth and she knew that she did and kind of did not want to go there at the same time.

If she thought hard, she couldn’t even remember buying a ticket. She didn’t have any bags with her. There were more oddities of this whole trip out of nowhere, but there was nothing she could do once the train pulled into the station and she felt compelled again to move and get off. She didn’t like the feeling, as if someone had wrapped a rope around her waist and kept tugging, even as she mentally tried to dig in her heels against it.

The train pulled away, accelerating quickly, before she can get on again.

Looking around, she did her best to observe as much as she could before she wandered off somewhere. A city had to have people, and someone should know what was going on. Why she was brought here, why they were brought here. Perhaps she was dreaming, or like in a science fiction novel, there was a tear in the fabric of the universe and she slipped through. Made sense with what she was currently working on back home. Maybe someone with powers (like Thor, though in a more magical sense) created this place in response to the tear and those tugs were just to get them to safety.

Or it could be something more sinister.

“Okay,” she said to herself, one hand on her hip as the other held the pocket watch she found in… where else? Her pocket. “Let’s find out why we’re here.”

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