At this time we are requesting a revision before we consider your application for acceptance. In particular, there are significant problems with grammar throughout that we believe need to be addressed so that we can be certain we clearly understand the points about the character that are being made. Some are a bit difficult to follow at current. Please revise for grammar, especially in terms of confusing run-on sentences, before resubmitting your revised application.
REVISION REQUESTED
At this time we are requesting a revision before we consider your application for acceptance. In particular, there are significant problems with grammar throughout that we believe need to be addressed so that we can be certain we clearly understand the points about the character that are being made. Some are a bit difficult to follow at current. Please revise for grammar, especially in terms of confusing run-on sentences, before resubmitting your revised application.