At this time we are requesting a revision before we consider your application for acceptance. In particular, we would like more information about the character's world as well as the character's history. We would like to hear more about the society the character comes from -- including any particular tensions/struggles/conflicts that exist. In your character's history, we would like to see more specific occurrences that helped shape him into what he is and show us about his character.
REVISION REQUESTED
At this time we are requesting a revision before we consider your application for acceptance. In particular, we would like more information about the character's world as well as the character's history. We would like to hear more about the society the character comes from -- including any particular tensions/struggles/conflicts that exist. In your character's history, we would like to see more specific occurrences that helped shape him into what he is and show us about his character.