However, at this time we are choosing to decline your application, as we feel the revisions you provided are more canon summary than analysis. You may re-apply if you so choose in two weeks time. If you do so, please keep in mind not to include examples from a further canon point than your character is being taken from to show her personality traits—the mention of Tigerclaw would not pertain to her character now.
In addition, if you do re-apply, please take the time to examine and embellish upon on the more negative emotions and characteristics of her character as well as delving deeper into the more emotionally fraught moments of her life.
DECLINED
However, at this time we are choosing to decline your application, as we feel the revisions you provided are more canon summary than analysis. You may re-apply if you so choose in two weeks time. If you do so, please keep in mind not to include examples from a further canon point than your character is being taken from to show her personality traits—the mention of Tigerclaw would not pertain to her character now.
In addition, if you do re-apply, please take the time to examine and embellish upon on the more negative emotions and characteristics of her character as well as delving deeper into the more emotionally fraught moments of her life.