Thank you for your application. While your app is well written, we ask that you revise the following before we can consider it for acceptance.
We cannot accept an application where headcanon contradicts established canon. For example, Chihiro does not seem to feel comfortable with women’s clothing or presenting himself as the opposite gender in canon. Rather, it is a matter of necessity because of his smaller form, and he has found that dressing and passing as a girl spares him the insults and mocking that would arise should he be seen as a weak male.
There are also problems with contradictions within the personality section - it is stated that he is unable to make friends, yet also that he gets along well with everyone. We are also confused as to why the character would so vehemently insist upon wearing female clothes and presenting as female as a matter of choice, rather than one of necessity, when he would rather fashion himself off a strong male. Please re-write/clarify so that we can properly understand the way the character presents himself and the reasoning behind it.
The first person sample also needs to be written in the present tense. If you have any questions, feel free to respond here or contact one of the mods.
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We cannot accept an application where headcanon contradicts established canon. For example, Chihiro does not seem to feel comfortable with women’s clothing or presenting himself as the opposite gender in canon. Rather, it is a matter of necessity because of his smaller form, and he has found that dressing and passing as a girl spares him the insults and mocking that would arise should he be seen as a weak male.
There are also problems with contradictions within the personality section - it is stated that he is unable to make friends, yet also that he gets along well with everyone. We are also confused as to why the character would so vehemently insist upon wearing female clothes and presenting as female as a matter of choice, rather than one of necessity, when he would rather fashion himself off a strong male. Please re-write/clarify so that we can properly understand the way the character presents himself and the reasoning behind it.
The first person sample also needs to be written in the present tense. If you have any questions, feel free to respond here or contact one of the mods.