First Person: (The name of the section says first person, but the description says third person, so this sample will be third present as the description says, if you need a first person as well, I will supply one.)
[Bae paced around. Henry and his Papa had showed him how to use the… watch… thing. He still was unsure about it. It was too much like magic. But… today was his first day alone since he got here… and it reminded him too much of when his father would vanish, as the Dark One… and reappear with some baubles that he thought that Bae would want; as if Bae would want them more than he wanted his Papa with him. The loneliness was eating him with worry for his father. So… he risked this…to ask Henry what he hadn’t quite dared ask in front of his father.]
“Is this magic?” He asked. A simple question that he tried to send to Henry and Henry alone.
[It might have helped if he specified what “this” he meant.]
Re: [CANON/Baelfire (Bae)|| Once Upon A Time || reserve || 3 of 3
First Person:
(The name of the section says first person, but the description says third person, so this sample will be third present as the description says, if you need a first person as well, I will supply one.)
[Bae paced around. Henry and his Papa had showed him how to use the… watch… thing. He still was unsure about it. It was too much like magic. But… today was his first day alone since he got here… and it reminded him too much of when his father would vanish, as the Dark One… and reappear with some baubles that he thought that Bae would want; as if Bae would want them more than he wanted his Papa with him. The loneliness was eating him with worry for his father. So… he risked this…to ask Henry what he hadn’t quite dared ask in front of his father.]
“Is this magic?” He asked. A simple question that he tried to send to Henry and Henry alone.
[It might have helped if he specified what “this” he meant.]
Third Person:
http://rubycity-ooc.dreamwidth.org/490852.html?thread=15726948#cmt15726948
This is Bae’s test drive thread, two concurrent tests of possible introductions for him into the city, 90 comments total.