At this time we are requesting a revision before we consider your application for acceptance. Specifically, we would like you to please examine and revise your application's writing samples, as we feel that they do not meet the standards we would like to see in actual gameplay. Both samples need to be proofread and touched up(not necessarily rewritten in their entirety), and the writing in your Third Person sample wavers a few times between past and present tense(Third Person writing needs to remain in the past tense).
We look forward to seeing your revision, and then, hopefully, to seeing you in the game! Thanks in advance for your understanding.
[REVISION REQUESTED]
At this time we are requesting a revision before we consider your application for acceptance. Specifically, we would like you to please examine and revise your application's writing samples, as we feel that they do not meet the standards we would like to see in actual gameplay. Both samples need to be proofread and touched up(not necessarily rewritten in their entirety), and the writing in your Third Person sample wavers a few times between past and present tense(Third Person writing needs to remain in the past tense).
We look forward to seeing your revision, and then, hopefully, to seeing you in the game! Thanks in advance for your understanding.